Saturday, November 23, 2013

The Saving Breath

By Michael Seese

Here we go again...

Janet (who was SO kind to me in a previous blog entry) has another 100-word contest. This week, the words are:

lot
heroic
caring
alert
flammable


Please enjoy "The Saving Breath."


Gas hissed from the valve under the unmistakable sign: FLAMMABLE. Sydney struck another match, only to watch it go out.


"Damn it! Why won't you light?"


She fell back, crying. So much had gone wrong lately, beginning with that night. Not caring about the weather alert, she drove to Cameron's. She remembered missing a curve in the road... Her car sinking... Gasping for air... Cameron's hand... His heroic tug... Watching him slip beneath the ice.


"I miss you, Cameron. I miss you a lot."


"I miss you, too. But it's not your time," he whispered, blowing out yet another match.



Feel free to share your thoughts. And remember, you have until Sunday, 11/24 @ 9:00 a.m. to enter...


7 comments:

  1. I found your blog via the fabulous Ms. Reid!

    Your entry is one of the ones I really liked, and I wasn't sure how to communicate that to you without being weird. So I'm glad you posted!

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    1. Thank you. That's very kind of you to say.

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  2. Well done, I think you have the best entry.

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  3. Ooh I like this. And one of the best things: I couldn't tell you were *forced* to use any of the words. They came so naturally to the story, and were knitted in very well. Awesome!

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  4. My wife and I both agreed this was the benchmark of the FFC. well done.

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    1. That was very kind of you to say so, both here and on Janet's blog.

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